Exercise 160704

The other morn

I looked up

and saw you,

a speck in

my vision. And

I wondered how

that could be

when right beside

me you are.

 

© 2017 L. Tafa

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Author: b20f08

I enjoy solo wargaming and writing. The first caters to the boy that never grew up; the latter satisfies a deep desire to communicate. Cheers.

1 thought on “Exercise 160704”

  1. Some people seem to connect with this piece or like it.

    It’s an observation we sometimes make when we’re with others. It may be an intimate relationship, or with friends at a social gathering or outing. With the latter, sometimes people’s behaviour can get out of hand. This piece might be a reaction to that particular moment when the one you know so well suddenly does something that surprises you utterly. Certainly enough to elicit this notion or response.

    The only correction I made was to add the comma after the word “you” in line three.

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